I came up with two.
Take my hand
When I am one
And I turn from you
Guide me
Be firm
Show me you
Are in control
Don’t let me
Be defiant
Otherwise when
I grow older
You will have
Lost control
Remembering
Past relationships
Working
At First Data
Making so
Many friends
And then
Reconnecting
With them in
The present
Reading and writing poetry seems so profound.
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Yes, you become aware of everything it seems.
ReplyDeleteGood job on getting some enjambed lines.
Okay, the main thing--be definite, specific, and concrete in your writing.
What does being in control look like? Show us.
And the 5 w's of prose apply to poetry as well. "Poetry is at least as good as prose."
Those drunk stories
ReplyDeleteEvery Monday
At First Data.
That drunken slut
Always made me laugh.
A year later she has changed.
Her stories are even more insane.
Take my hand when
ReplyDeleteI am one,
When I turn
from you guide me.
Be firm - show me you
are in control - don’t
let me be defiant,
otherwise when I
grow older
You will have
lost control.